Monday, September 7, 2009
Textaholism--Made up word, or sweeping epidemic?
I don’t want to die. I assume many of you don’t have a desire to either. Yet almost every day we needlessly put our lives at risk. What is to blame? No, it’s not Samara, the evil girl from "The Ring," but it’s something equally frightening—texting. Many people on the road flip open their phones when the jingle sounds and begin tapping away at the buttons; oblivious to the people they are putting in jeopardy. The needless texting puts countless humans in danger and inevitably leads to more accidents and fatalities on the pavement. Supposing the culprits aren’t murderers and vandals, we would assume they would obey the law and heed the safety of themselves and others. However, that isn’t always the case.
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Best I've read yet. Very descriptive, I really like the topic idea and I agree that it is a very serious problem! Attention grabbing and intriguing. I would definitely use some pathos and relate to some dramatic death story involving this scenario.
ReplyDeleteI like this argument, because there have been many accidents caused by texting. I am guilty of this, and I'm not saying it's right. Sometimes when I'm riding as a passenger, and my friend's texting while driving, I feel as though he isn't paying attention at all, and the feeling is a bit unsettling.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very good topic and you bring up some very good points to support your arguement. The only thing that I was thinking about though is that almost everyone agrees that texting while driving isn't very safe at all, so who is it that you are trying to convince?
ReplyDeleteExcellent work. The topic as a whole is a big problem and it keeps getting worse as the population becomes a bigger fan of texting. A little use of pathos could dramatically change this into an even better writing, especially since it was good to begin with.
ReplyDeleteI love your title, both catchy and relevant. Some statistics would make your already strong message even more powerful still.
ReplyDeleteGreat title and very catchy to read. It kept me drawn into the reading and actually makes me concerned considering i think everyone has probably done this at some point. My only recommendation would be i think you can almost make your introduction shorter by presenting less facts in your intro. For example putting "The needless texting puts countless humans in danger and inevitably leads to more accidents and fatalities on the pavement." would be a good sentence to use in your introduction to the body of your paper to draw the reader in. Just a possibility but its really just preference.
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