Monday, September 7, 2009

A Worth While Investment

"BYU! BYU! BYU!" shouts the student body after the recent victory over Oklahoma in this past weekend's football game. Hearts filled with school spirit and pride, the students anticipate the next big game. Sports are a big deal at BYU, and the athletes are highly respected, but what about those student-athletes who are unable to play for their school anymore because their university simply lacks the sport? Must they be forced to stop doing what they love, and not be able to compete in an intercollegic sport? Brigham Young University receives a great number of students who would love to play waterpolo for their school. Not only do they receive students who played in highschool, they receive students who gave up opportunities to play at other universities to attend BYU. The university already receives students from all over the world, which is one of the reasons why it does so well in sports. Many students, not only from across America, but worldwide would love to play for BYU if they had a team, and not only would they play, but be able to keep up with other top schools in the country. Not only would the school gain strengthen its reputation, but also give more Latter-Day-Saints the opportunity to attend BYU and better their lives from it. And isn't that part of the school's goals? To enlighten its students spiritually as well as mentally through the education it offers. Not only would this team provide more students with the experience of a lifetime, but strengthen testimonies, convert non-member athletes, raise money, and increase BYU's reputation. Creating a waterpolo team at Brigham Young University would be one of the best decision's the school could make.

4 comments:

  1. I think it could be good for your argument if you talk about or list all of the sports that BYU doesn't offer, in order to interest a larger audience, rather than just water polo fans and players.

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  2. I like your grab of attention at the beginning, but I do believe as jordan said you could add more sports that BYU doesn't offer to support your opinion and have a larger audience. Also, watch for using "not only" too much in the later half of your intro.

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